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[17]SSC#4 The Elves and the Storymaker

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Hello Everyone!!!

 

It is already April. I only have two months of junior year left. But as the end of this academic year is approaching, I become more tired and uneasy. Don't worry, though. I will be stable enough to lead this book club.

 

I have one thing to tell you. When I check you assignment, what do you think I first see? Grammar? Correctness?

The first thing, the most important thing I see is if it answers the question specifically. Even when answering for the reading comprehension questions, you should try to write as specific as you can. You should imagine that I am a person who had never read that book. Then, I see the length. But usually, if you be specific, your answer will automatically be long. Then I look at the grammar, and the last thing I care is the correctness. The reason of this checking system is that I think book club as a thing that makes you think and write more than a thing that just makes you read. ALSO, I THINK  EVERYONE IN THIS BOOK CLUB KNOWS HOW TO READ AND READ WELL. ALMOST 0% OF THIS BOOK CLUB GETS WRONG IN THEIR ANSWER IN TERMS OF THE CORRECTNESS.

 

So, to improve your english, in my opinion, you should spend more time on thinking and writing, rather than only focusing on reading. Still, this does not mean that you do not have to read. I am saying that the reading is a basic thing that you have to do to remain in this book club.

 

Many people become specific on one or two parts of their assignment. I appreciate their effort. However, not many people do that on their entire assignment.

 

To be honest, I can read one SSC book in three minutes. However, I spend at least an hour for making questions and commenting on your works. For me at Sunday night, when I have an essay due Monday morning, one hour is actually not little. When you become lazy about writing more than you think it is enough, think about me, and I hope you can get motivated.

 

I am not blaming you guys for not being industrious. As I said earlier, I know everyone reads the book and do the assignment. What I want to say is that your work would be much better and your English would be much better if you care a little bit more about thinking and writing.

 

So, may I expect some wonderful works next week?

I know you will do really well and impress me. Let's do this!!!

 

Have a very nice week and I will be waiting for some magnificent works!!!


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WFS Alex 2013-04-15 02:40:27
Don't worry Marry you don't have to recall the title of the original because you know what happens in the original, which I think is more important. And I am sorry that I made a mistake at question 2 (1), where I said her instead of him.
What happened on the life of the storymaker part? I think you misunderstood the question. I was asking you to write about the past life of the storymaker that is not in the book.
Next time, if you can't understand the question very well, send me a ÂÊÁö through this website. I will answer as soon as possible.

Grammar:
I think she want to her husband was happy -> I think she wants her husband to be happy

I will be waiting for a nice work next week! Take care!
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WFS Alex 2013-04-15 02:29:18
Well done Ryan!!
I like your own life of the storymaker, especially when the storymaker's father leaves his computer and pen to his son. I have never thought of this kind, so it is pretty creative and novel to me. Very nice job!
But there is one slight problem. I cannot really understand what you are trying to say at question 2 (2).
Grammer:
very seryus -> very serious
she think lie is -> she thinks lie is

Overall, you did a nice job since you supported your ideas well and was creative. Good work this week and keep it up!
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WFS Alex 2013-04-15 02:19:26
Hello Steven?
First of all, I would say all your answers make sense. I can assume why you wrote those kind of answers and they are all correct in terms of content. However, as I emphasized earlier for several times, you should support your thoughts. You should not let your reader assume the reasons but be more specific and reasonable so that your readers can catch your thinking as soon as they read. If you had explained a little bit more about your ideas, your work would have been perfect.
Still, I am glad that I can understand all your answers because it probably means that we have a similar thoughts about the questions.

Grammar:
She want earn the money -> She wants to earn money (try to use present tense when you write what happened in the book.)
She feel embarrassing -> She is embarrassed

Overall, you did a fine job and you have some room to be better. I know that you will do well next time, so I will be waiting for your perfect work!
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WFS Alex 2013-04-15 02:07:50
Absolutely fantastic work, Jessica!!!
Very nice job on supporting your ideas in your answers for the reading comprehension questions. This is exactly what I want and expect from you, and you did very well.
Also, your own life of the storymaker is very impressive since you started from his µ¹ÀâÀÌ, where he grabbed a pencil. You also made him try something else than writing, which however did not fit him. I actually think your story is much interesting than the book!!

Grammar: He wrote to many -> He wrote too many.
she tell -> she tells, man's wife make up -> man's wife makes up

Thank you for having done a fantastic job this week. It was very impressive.
I will be waiting for another wonderful work next week!!
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