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Let's talk about the relationship of your friends.
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Spelling/öÀÚ 2. relationsh!! : relationships. 10. nowdays : nowadays 14. veyr : very 15. Nowdays : Nowadays | ||
Grammar_Articles(the, a or an)/°ü»ç | ||
Grammar_Prepositions(on, at, from, by, to.....)/ÀüÄ¡»ç | ||
Grammar_Conjunction(and, but)/Á¢¼Ó»ç | ||
Grammar_Capitalization/´ë¼Ò¹®ÀÚ 6. Bad : bad 12. Because : because | ||
Grammar_Conjugation/µ¿»çº¯ÈÈ°¿ë 28. is : are | ||
Grammar_Punctuation/ºÎÈ£»ç¿ë 19. very : very, 20. *****!! : *****! 24. beautiful!! : beautiful! 26. tall!! : tall! 29. very : very, 30. long!! : long! 35. *****!! : *****! 38. good!! But, : good but 40. pretty!! : pretty! 43. pretty!! : pretty! | ||
Essay Format_Sentence Structure/¹®ÀåÀÇ ±¸¼º 4. friends relationsh is : have different friends 5. Best : like best 7. Good : and good 8. My friend. My : My 9. school best friends name is : best friends in school are 11. not with. : I am not with them 13. everyday different class. : we are in different classes everyday. 16. unpleasant : is unpleasant 18. pretty!! : pretty and 25. very : is very 27. Leg : Her legs 31. perfection model!! : like a model in perfection! 32. ¹ÎÁö!! : and ¹ÎÁö. 33. Bus in with chattering : Chattering in the bus 34. very : is very 39. nowdays very scared!! : scary nowadays. 41. My friends very many!! : I have many friends 42. everyone : they are | ||
Essay Format_inappropriate Words/´Ü¾î»ç¿ë ÀûÀý¼º 1. very very many : many 3. My : I 17. Assume : It is 21. with feeling : feels 22. is very very : very 23. good! good! : good! 36. is : sings 37. glld!! : well. |
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Hello! I appreciate your effort in writing this response. I think some of your details are quite relevant because you have discussed your relationship with your friends. However, I noticed that your details are mostly deions of your friends. These details are not what the topic asks for. You should focus more on describing yout relationship with them instead. Please write complete and correct sentences. Practice using the basic sentence patterns as guides. Phrase them with appropriate words and expression!!s. Avoid using Korean characters in an English composition because they cannot be corrected grammatically. Please study the corrections and practice. You can do it.
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