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1. Myfriends relationship is 2. friend.
Becuse 3. it 4. is 5. friend. My best 6. friend 7. is only three.
8. It 9. is 10. (ÁØÈ£, À±Èñ, Á¾¼ö) 11. they are my best friends.
12. Is it 13. very very good and nice. 14. My boy friend is very very very many.
15. And they are fun and good. I 16. didn't have 17. girl 18. friend.
Becuse it is not good and nice.
They 19. are angry it is strong very very much.
I hit 20. the girl. After 21. girl is angry, 22. sad and 23. fighting.
24. And girl 25. crying 26. veryvery much. Bad 27. girl and bad 28. boy 29. is bad so much.
30. My class in the bad boy 31. very very much. 32. Bad boy 33. punch me. I 34. am 35. angry.
Becuse he 36. attack me. After, I 37. am 38. angry very very much.
I 39. am hit the bad boy 40. head. It 41. is good and perfect.
After, 42. bad boy 43. has crying. He and I 44. fighting. I 45. am 46. winner.
I 47. am happy. 48. Bad boy 49. run into 50. teachers room. I 51. am 52. dangerous.
53. Bad boy 54. saying. 55. Teacher is 56. angry.
57. After 58. Teacher 59. say "60. come on 61. jun he." I 62. am nervous and 63. scary.
64. Teacher hit the bad boy and my hand. After we 65. are saying.
"Sorry" 66. I and he said. It 67. is very nice and happy. Teacher 68. is 69. happy very very much. 70. And bad boy 71. happy too. I 72. am 73. many many friends.
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Grammar_Articles(the, a or an)/°ü»ç 17. girl : a girl 20. the : a 21. girl : the girl 24. And : The 42. bad : the bad 46. winner. : the winner. 48. Bad : The bad 50. teachers : the teacher's 70. And : The | ||
Grammar_Prepositions(on, at, from, by, to.....)/ÀüÄ¡»ç | ||
Grammar_Conjunction(and, but)/Á¢¼Ó»ç 15. And they : They | ||
Grammar_Capitalization/´ë¼Ò¹®ÀÚ 58. Teacher : teacher 60. come : Come 61. jun he : Jun He | ||
Grammar_Conjugation/µ¿»çº¯ÈÈ°¿ë 4. is : are 7. is : are 9. is : are 16. didn't : don't 25. crying : cries 33. punch : punched 34. am : was 36. attack : attacked 39. am hit : hit 41. is : was 43. has crying : cried 44. fighting : fought 45. am : was 47. am : was 49. run : ran 51. am : was 54. saying. : said, 59. say : said, 62. am : was 65. are saying. : said 67. is : was 68. is : was | ||
Grammar_Punctuation/ºÎÈ£»ç¿ë 10. (ÁØÈ£, À±Èñ, Á¾¼ö) : ÁØÈ£, À±Èñ, Á¾¼ö 13. very : very, 18. friend. Becuse : friend because 22. sad : sad, 35. angry. Becuse : angry because 55. Teacher : "Teacher 56. angry. : angry." 73. many : many, | ||
Essay Format_Sentence Structure/¹®ÀåÀÇ ±¸¼º 1. Myfriends : My friends' 2. friend. Becuse : friendly because 11. they : and they 14. My boy friend is very very very many. : I have many male friends. 19. are angry it is strong very very much. : can be very angry. 23. fighting. : tries to fight. 29. is bad so much : can be really bad 30. My class in the : There is a 31. very very much : in my class 32. Bad : This bad 38. angry very very much. : really angry. 40. head : in the head 64. Teacher : Our teacher 66. I and he said. : to each other. 69. happy very very much : very happy 71. happy : was happy, | ||
Essay Format_inappropriate Words/´Ü¾î»ç¿ë ÀûÀý¼º 3. it : we 5. friend : friends 6. friend : friends 8. It : They 12. Is it : They are 26. veryvery much : a lot 27. girl : girls 28. boy : boys 37. am : was 52. dangerous. : in danger. 53. Bad boy : He 57. After : Our 63. scary. : scared. 72. am : have |
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Good day! I appreciate your effort in writing this essay. I think that your supporting details are relevant to the topic and are quite meaningful. You have good ideas. You have discussed your relationship with your friends and even wrote your own experience as an example of how friendly relationships can be so complex at times. Structure-wise, however, I think that you need to practice sentence writing some more using the basic sentence patterns as guides. Phrase them properly with appropriate and varied words and expression!!s. Your verbs for example should be in the correct tense (past tense for past events). Avoid fragments by not separating the clauses you already combined with "because". Use transition words to properly organize them and make them flow smoothly. Check the corrections. Good luck to you