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What kinds of stories are well-known in your country? Write about a popular story you know.
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I will write about 1. Simchung story.
There was a girl 2. that named Simchung.
She had a 3. father but her mother died when she was young.
Her 4. father,Simbongsa 5. is 6. a blind person but he 7. beg 8. Simchung's 9. milks.
Simchung 10. likes her father.
One day, 11. A monk 12. said,If Simbongsa 13. gives 300 14. packages of 15. rice to the monk,
16. Simbongsa can open his eyes.
17. But Simbongsa and Simchung didn't have them.
18. Finally,she jumped 19. to the 20. sea and got the 300 21. packages of rice.
22. But 23. Simbongsa can't open his eyes.
At the Dragon King's Palace, there 24. is a blind 25. person's party, Simchung
and Simbongsa 26. met there, 27. than Simbongsa 28. opened his eyes.
They 29. live happily 30. all the rest of their lives.
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Spelling/öÀÚ 27. than : then | ||
Grammar_Articles(the, a or an)/°ü»ç | ||
Grammar_Prepositions(on, at, from, by, to.....)/ÀüÄ¡»ç 8. Simchung : for Simchung 19. to : into | ||
Grammar_Conjunction(and, but)/Á¢¼Ó»ç 17. But : However, 22. But : Nevertheless, 30. all : for | ||
Grammar_Capitalization/´ë¼Ò¹®ÀÚ 11. A : a | ||
Grammar_Conjugation/µ¿»çº¯ÈÈ°¿ë 5. is : was 7. beg : begged 10. likes : liked 24. is : was 29. live : lived | ||
Grammar_Punctuation/ºÎÈ£»ç¿ë 3. father : father, 4. father,Simbongsa : father, Simbongsa, 18. Finally,she : Finally, she 20. sea : sea, | ||
Essay Format_Sentence Structure/¹®ÀåÀÇ ±¸¼º 2. that named : named 12. said,If : said that if 13. gives : gave him 15. rice to the monk : rice 16. Simbongsa can open his : he could open Simbongsa's 23. Simbongsa can't open his : he could not open Simbongsa's 28. opened his eyes : eyes were opened | ||
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The story was a bit strange. How was Simchung able to get rice from the sea? Anyway, thank you for sharing the story. However, I suggest you learn more about sentence construction and how to write an essay. An essay has an introduction, a body, and a conclusion. In addition, the paragraphs should have at least five sentences each, and make sure to put a space between the paragraphs. Review the use of articles and prepositions. If you are not sure which word to use, or about the spelling of a word, use a thesaurus, a dictionary, and the web, or ask your teacher. Use words or phrases like "however", "in addition", and "that is why" instead of beginning your sentences with conjunctions. Put a space after commas. If you want to talk about something that happened in the past, use the past tense of the verb. Do write more!