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How 1. is 2. reationship with your 3. friends 4. club morie cimp uter muis sprts school best friends girl friends boy friends good friends bed friends the back good friends many

 

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2. reationship : your relationships
4. club morie cimp uter muis sprts school best friends girl friends boy friends good friends bed friends the back good friends many : Well, I met my best friends when I joined the Computer Club, Music Club, and Sports Club. I have many girl and boy friends. Some of them are nice, while some are not. (?)
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Hi. I'm glad that you were able to express your opinion in this essay. It's good that you exerted effort, but I think you need to exert more. Try to develop an introduction, body, and conclusion by adding more relevant details and by elaborating your sentences concisely. Then, revise your sentences to make them more meaningful. Pay attention to word usage, verb forms and tenses, and use of logical connectors. Also, use punctuation marks properly. Do not forget to put a period after every sentence and a comma whenever it is needed. Likewise, when you have an interrogative sentence, please do not forget to put a question mark at the end of it. Lastly, always review and edit your essay to avoid having mistakes such as misspelled words. Continue studying to further develop your skills and widen your vocabulary, too. I know you can do it! Good luck and have a great day!


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