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Wow, you are that fast on a bike? I want to see you ride one time! On your essay, it was going quite well in there -- you had the ideas, but somehow, you cut your essay too short. You had ideas, but you didn't have supporting ideas for them. Next time, try to jot down your ideas first, okay? Use the parts of an essay as your outline when organizing your thoughts. On your sentences, you had a lot of errors regarding verb forms and tenses. You also had errors on subject and verb agreement. Don't neglect minor punctuation errors -- these give your readers breathing space in your essay. Check your spelling first on a dictionary, okay? You could do better than this, just like you can ride faster than the others combined! Keep on going, okay?