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I have 1.to many 2.boy friend and girl friend
3.Most I have just one 4.many boy friend and 5.girl 6.friendiend
7.First 8.My best girl friend is 9.gee young My 10.friend name
11.Gee young is 12.a very 13.kind and very 14.beautiful and she 15.very fast run
How 16.she meet? I 17.am 18.5 grade 19.I am she meet
20.I am she 21.so very 22.happy
I have 23.to two 24.best boy 25.friend
26.one is 27.min gon and 28.one is 29.da ho 30.he are 31.too 32.kind
33.min gon favorite 34.sports 35.run and 36.da ho favorite 37.sports 38.swimming
39.But 40.da ho 41.not 42.swimming because he 43.very 44.sore that's 45.too bad 46.and he win disease fighting
47.And I have 48.a good 49.friend
50.my around many and all good 51.friend 52.after I am make the many boy friend and girl friend and many boy friend and girl friend best boy friend and My best girl friend
53.teacher? you have 54.a many 55.boy friend and girl friend and many boy friend and girl friend best boy friend and best girl friend ?
56.And how many 57.boy 58.friend and 59.girl 60.friend 61.and many boy friend and girl friend best boy friend and best girl friend ?
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Grammar_Articles(the, a or an)/°ü»ç 12.a very : very | ||
Grammar_Prepositions(on, at, from, by, to.....)/ÀüÄ¡»ç | ||
Grammar_Conjunction(and, but)/Á¢¼Ó»ç | ||
Grammar_Capitalization/´ë¼Ò¹®ÀÚ 8.My : my 9.gee young : Gee Young. 11.Gee young : Gee Young 26.one : One 27.min gon : Min Gon, 29.da ho : Da Ho. 33.min gon : Min Gon's 36.da ho : Da Ho's 40.da ho : Da Ho's | ||
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Grammar_Punctuation/ºÎÈ£»ç¿ë 7.First : First, 13.kind and : kind, 14.beautiful : beautiful, 22.happy : happy. 32.kind : kind. 49.friend : friends. | ||
Essay Format_Sentence Structure/¹®ÀåÀÇ ±¸¼º 1.to many : a lot of 2.boy friend and girl friend : friends. 3.Most : Most of the time, 6.friendiend : girl friend that tags along with me. 10.friend name : friend 15.very fast run : can run very fast. 18.5 : in 5th 19.I am she meet : when I met her. 20.I am she : We both were 21.so very : so 23.to two : two 24.best boy : male best 25.friend : friends. 28.one : the other one 30.he : They 31.too : both too 35.run : is running 38.swimming : is swimming. 41.not : could not 42.swimming : swim lately 43.very : is very 44.sore : sick 46.and he win disease fighting : he has to fight the disease. 47.And I : I also 48.a : lots of 50.my around many and all : All of my these are 51.friend : friends of mine. 52.after I am make the many boy friend and girl friend and many boy friend and girl friend best boy friend and My best girl friend : I believe I would still make a lot of friends in the future. 53.teacher? you : How about you, teacher? Do you 54.a many : a lot of 55.boy friend and girl friend and many boy friend and girl friend best boy friend and best girl friend ? : friends and best friends, too? 56.And : If so, 61.and many boy friend and girl friend best boy friend and best girl friend ? : do you have, teacher? | ||
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Wow, you must have a lot of friends there! How many do you have? I have a lot of friends here, too! Keep the real ones -- they are the ones who'll stick with you for life! On your essay, I see that you have a lot of ideas up there. You lacked certain parts of an essay, though. Avoid repeating the same idea on essay, okay? On your sentences, it'll be good for you to browse through your grammar books. Study on sentence structure. Your sentences were quite confusing because they had jumbled parts. Observe proper capitalization too, okay? Same with punctuations. Give it your best next time, okay? Good luck!