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What do you think is the most interesting sea creature? Why?
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I think the most interesting sea creature is 1. Jellyfish.
2. Because The Jellyfish is very interesting.
The 3. Jellyfish 4. is live in the 5. far deep 6. ocean.
7. So We don't have 8. worried.
9. But we have 10. attention. 11. Step one 12. Jellyfish is 13. poisonous creature.
14. Step two 15. the Jellyfish 16. is died 17. but it 18. sting. 19. So dangerous.
20. When 21. I'm killed 22. the 23. Jellyfish.24. It's scared.25. Jellyfish is died.
My sister 26. has many Curiosity So she touched 27. the 28. Jellyfish.
29. But she 30. has 31. not 32. reaction.My sister has not fear.
I 33. say "Don't do 34. that!!!" So she 35. not touch the 36. Jellyfish.
The Lion Mane Jellyfish is 37. Very big 38. Jellyfish in the Earth.
I 39. see 40. the 41. poto 42. of Lion Mane Jellyfish it's very big than 43. person.
It's 44. 35 meter creature. The Jellyfish doesn't have brain, eyes, 45. heart anything. 46. However the Jellyfish eat 47. their food? I'm so 48. interesting.
I want to find the answer, but I can't find 49. answer. 50. Hey you! 51. However the 52. Jelly fish 53. is eat 54. their food? 55. You're homework. We 56. kill 57. Jellyfish 58. it's fun.
59. Because 60. Jellyfish is 61. my 62. scared ocean creature. Do you know 63. the spongi bob?
64. Sponzi bob is 65. don't scared 66. the 67. Jellyfish. I 68. want to don't scared 69. the 70. Jellyfish.
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Spelling/öÀÚ 41. poto : photo 52. Jelly fish : jellyfish | ||
Grammar_Articles(the, a or an)/°ü»ç 1. Jellyfish : the jellyfish Note: Use a small letter. 11. Step one : The 13. poisonous : a poisonous 27. the : a 37. Very : a very Note: Use a small letter. 43. person : a person 44. 35 : a 35 49. answer : the answer 59. Because : A 61. my : a | ||
Grammar_Prepositions(on, at, from, by, to.....)/ÀüÄ¡»ç 22. the : by the 66. the : of the 69. the : of the | ||
Grammar_Conjunction(and, but)/Á¢¼Ó»ç 9. But : However, Note: Add a comma. 14. Step two : When Note: Capitalize it. 20. When : If 29. But she : She 45. heart : heart, or Note: Insert a comma. | ||
Grammar_Capitalization/´ë¼Ò¹®ÀÚ 3. Jellyfish : jellyfish 7. So We : so we 12. Jellyfish : jellyfish 23. Jellyfish. : jellyfish Note: Remove the period. 28. Jellyfish : jellyfish 36. Jellyfish :jellyfish 58. it's : It's 60. Jellyfish : jellyfish 67. Jellyfish : jellyfish 70. Jellyfish : jellyfish | ||
Grammar_Conjugation/µ¿»çº¯ÈÈ°¿ë 4. is live : lives 8. worried : to worry 16. is died : dies 18. sting : stings 30. has : had 33. say : said, Note: Add a comma. 39. see : saw 48. interesting : interested 53. is eat : eat 56. kill : will kill | ||
Grammar_Punctuation/ºÎÈ£»ç¿ë 6. ocean. : ocean, 34. that!!!" : that!" 50. Hey : Hey, | ||
Essay Format_Sentence Structure/¹®ÀåÀÇ ±¸¼º 2. Because The Jellyfish is very interesting. The : The 5. far deep : deep 10. attention : to pay attention 17. but it : it still 25. Jellyfish is died. : The jellyfish is still poisonous even when dead 26. has many Curiosity So : is very curious, so once 32. reaction.My sister has not : reaction and she did not feel 35. not : did not 38. Jellyfish in the Earth : jellyfish 42. of Lion Mane Jellyfish it's very big : and realized that it's bigger 57. Jellyfish : a jellyfish. 63. the spongi bob : Sponge Bob 68. want to don't : don't want to be | ||
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The article was able to explain what makes the jellyfish an interesting animal. You can express yourself well. I think that you make a lively conversationalist. When writing, however, there are many things we have to consider. Capitalization, spelling, and punctuation are basic areas. The presentation of the essay should be in paragraph form as this is an effective way to organize a lot of ideas. With regard to word forms, take note of adjectives that describe feelings and those that describe objects. For example, scary and interesting both describe an object. Scared and interested both describe what one feels. So we say: The jellyfish is scary. I am scared of the jellyfish. The jellyfish is interesting. I am interested about the jellyfish. Keep on writing, Min Soo. Have a great week ahead!