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If you could design a new flag for South Korea what would it look like? Why would you choose these symbols to represent South Korea?
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I appreciate your effort to share your ideas. You understood the question well, and I think you were able to give a good answer for it. However, I was confused with most of your sentences because of your construction. I can say that you sometimes find it hard to organize your words properly in your sentences, thus your thoughts are a bit confusing. Pay attention to the corrections and try your best next time to construct your sentences more effectively. You have good grammar skills, but focus on your word order. Just keep on reading books and I'm sure you will improve a lot.
Good luck in your studies! Have a great day!