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The coldest 1. city is 2. a 3. south pole, 4. south pole 5. is 6. best coldest temperature 7. is -88.3 8. degree.
9. The 10. coldest 11. city is 12. a 13. north 14. pole.
The hottest city 15. is 16. a iraq 17. in 18. baseulra, 19. Iraq 20. in 21. baseulra 22. is 23. best hottest temperature 24. is baseulra 58.8 25. degree.
The hottest city 26. is 27. a siberia 28. in 29. to verkhoyansk, 30. siberia 31. in 32. to verkhoyansk 33. is 34. best hotter temperature 35. is 36. -68 degree.
The hottest city 37. is 38. a korea 39. in Junggangjin, 40. korea 41. in 42. Junggangjin 43. is 44. best hotter temperature 45. is 46. -43.6 degree.
47. The 48. hottest city 49. is 50. a korea 51. in 52. daegu, 53. korea 54. in 55. daegu 56. is 57. best hotter temperature 58. is 40 59. degree.
60. The 61. hottest city 62. is a 63. hongkong, 64. hongkong 65. is 66. best 67. hotter temperature 68. is 40-50 69. degree.
The hottest 70. country is 71. a 72. sahara desert. 73. sahara 74. desert 75. is best hotter temperature 76. is 40-45 77. degree.
The coldest 78. country 79. is a 80. verkhoyansk, 81. verkhoyansk 82. is 83. best coldest temperature 84. is -67.8 85. degree.
86. The 87. hottest city 88. is a 89. irap in basra, 90. irap in basra 91. is best hottest 92. temperatuer 93. is 58.8 94. degree.
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Grammar_Prepositions(on, at, from, by, to.....)/ÀüÄ¡»ç 7. is : at 15. is : in 26. is : in 29. to verkhoyansk : Verkhoyansk 32. to verkhoyansk : Verkhoyansk 37. is : in 49. is : in | ||
Grammar_Conjunction(and, but)/Á¢¼Ó»ç 81. verkhoyansk : and | ||
Grammar_Capitalization/´ë¼Ò¹®ÀÚ 3. south : South 13. north : North 14. pole : Pole 18. baseulra : Baseulra 20. in : In 21. baseulra : Baseulra, 30. siberia : Siberia. 31. in : In 40. korea : Korea. 41. in : In 52. daegu : Daegu 54. in : In 55. daegu : Daegu, 63. hongkong : Hongkong 64. hongkong : Hongkong 72. sahara : Sahara 80. verkhoyansk : Verkhoyansk | ||
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Grammar_Punctuation/ºÎÈ£»ç¿ë 19. Iraq : Iraq. 42. Junggangjin : Junggangjin, | ||
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Those were mean facts! I don't think I'd be able to survive in all of those cities. Next time, make an outline of your ideas to make the essay more logical and organized. Lots of content is good, but it has to make sense. There has to be a clear introduction, body of supporting statements, and conclusion. The transition between these 3 parts has to be smooth and interconnected. Double-check your facts - remember that you are imparting information to your reader, so make sure that everything is accurate. Add variety to your sentence structure as well. Observe correct grammar, such as subject-verb agreement and tenses. Use a dictionary to verify the spelling of your vocabulary. Keep practicing