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Grammar_Capitalization/´ë¼Ò¹®ÀÚ 10. i : I 12. i : I 20. bread : Bread | ||
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Thank you for sharing your ideas. I'm sure that you had a lot to say, but unfortunately, your ideas were all scrambled up. Try to study basic sentence construction first. Write a list of your main points and make an outline. This will make your essay more organized. Avoid using big, flowery vocabulary. Stick to simple words and expression!!s to help your reader understand your message more clearly. Make sure that the introduction, body, and conclusion are present. Identify your main idea and wrok your way around that. The essay has to have direction. Keep practicing, okay? Good luck!