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Describe your house or apartment.
Then list the ways in which you would improve it with all of your family members in mind.
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Today, there are many designs 1. of 2. apartment.
3. And lately now there are 4. High rise residential 5. building,
6. it's apartment and store put together and it's more comfortable and 7. good.
8. I'm live 9. in 10. High-rise residential 11. building too.
12. But, I want to 13. Lay out my room.
Do you want to know how I want 14. to Lay out my room?
15. Look it this essay!
First thing is that, I want to 16. expansion my room 17. more big.
18. And than, I will put more furniture in my room.
I want to do this 19. thing's because big
and 20. put more furniture 21. more successful to live.
22. Second thing is that, I want to 23. make secret room in my room.
24. And there, I will put my secret diary and game 25. player.
When I 26. was scolded 27. to my mom, I will go to my secret room,
and I will hide in the room.
These are 28. my guidelines of how to lay out my house.
Do you want some 29. new thing?
30. lay out your own house!
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You were able to give an idea how you apartment looks like and what the main changes would be. However, take note that the topic asks you to design the house with your family members in mind. This means you may have to change other parts of the house that they use like the living room, the dining room, their own rooms, etc. You may also give details about how your apartment looks like because high rise buildings differ. Apartments differ because the personaliy of those who live in them vary also.
Don't forget to capitalize the first word of each sentence. It's always good to review what we have written to check on errors we might not have seen. Take note of your word forms, too. If you want to express what you want to do, use the base verb after 'I want to...' Ex: I want to 'sing.' I want to 'call' my friend. I want to 'expand' my room.
Keep on writing, Yeong Ree. Have a great day!